The reasons she gave when slitting her arm from wrist to elbow didn’t work

Because the blood beneath her skin
needed to breathe, because it churned
and begged to be free, to run across the smooth

pale length of her hands and drip
to the floor, to sit there shocking
and grotesque, so like polka dots,

because she didn’t know
what else to do, because the knife
was sharp, because there weren’t

enough phone calls, because there were
too many, because its Tuesday, because
art is no longer enough, because she didn’t

want to walk the dog, because war
is too terrible to exist, because she
is too terrible to exist, because.

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7 responses to “The reasons she gave when slitting her arm from wrist to elbow didn’t work

  1. I love the progression of this. like the whole thing a lot, alot. You might play with the punctuation at the end, like changing it to “is too terrible to exist. Because.” I’m not totally sure, just a thought…

  2. Bleak and effective. Powerful stuff.

  3. Thank you both. I wanted it to be gut punch-ish. I am afraid it is melodramatic…

  4. hmmm….i’m not sure what i think of this yet. i’d be curious to see a revision.

    i think the random things like “because it’s Tuesday” and “because she didn’t want to walk the dog” pull it away from melodrama, but also minimize any punch-in-the-gut effect.

  5. polkadotwitch

    technically, this is a list poem which i love. i’m a big fan of the list poem. however, you did the line breaks and the pacing so spectacularly, it’s barely noticeable that it’s a list poem. awesome. and, as always, a brave piece.

  6. Thank you all.

    I really like list poems, too. and thank you for the bravery comment

  7. Visceral, really hard to read but wonderful and yes, I’m a huge fan of list poems too — because is the motor.

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